Hello, I am not really one to talk about getting alot of views but i can help you get better antiquated with technology that might help you get better views.
You are using share factory, not a very good method of getting content up, it usually comes to youtube with some gross tearing and audio bites.
Try exporting the media you record to a flash drive or external hardrive and editing on pc.
Turn down the game sound a tad.
Get a Boom and Mic, Audio is important, but so is your personal experience, try using a Boom and Mic for way better audio and use headphones to still enjoy your games, then when editing dub in some light free music.
Stories should always be pre thought out and well explained, if your intention is to say them during the game, let us know that is the goal, to do something complicated while kicking some a**.
Final get an Intro that isn't loud and over used, Intro Champs have some good ones cheap and they are all editable.
Hope i helped and good luck, you def got the talent.
