(I'm using your Pokemon GO Swatting video as a reference). Ok, well right of the bat, the audio for the gameplay is way to high. When the guns fire, they overpower your voice and it's distracting to the viewer from hearing you. Also, it sounds like in your video that you're either tired or bored. I'm not saying that you need to be hyperactive but be a bit more lively. Also, this might be your style so you can ignore this part if you want, but maybe turn down the swearing. However, one a brighter note, you're very well composed in your speech and you have little to no stutters or "uhhhs" in your speech, so good job on that.