okay here we go fam.
1) Scripting - jump cuts are nice, but not when they cut you mid sentence.
2) Audio - holy sh*t the air was loud af in your second vid
3) Content - i keked at the first vid, but the second one i clicked off within a minute. I think for now you should keep your vids short, script, make sure you do small things correctly before slowly increasing the duration of your vids and content type
hope this helped!
Best of luck!