The overall premise wasn't bad. I'm not really a fan of repeating shots. Like defaulting to Duck Hunt gameplay while talking, but that's a pretty big trend so I'm the odd man out in that scenario.
Overall the two things I think has room for improvement would be the general audio quality, it kinda jumps about and that change can be distracting, and your overall tone through recording. It sort of feels like you're reading from a script, monotone and occasional pauses mid sentence, but the swearing and quick jabs makes it sound like you were shooting for more of a rant which would of sounded better. What I would say is you need to get loose. Just go at it and rip into the subject or slow down and rationalize. Changing pace and tone.