You're trying too hard to make it a funny video. Pasting in emoticons, sounds and other stuff is not going to get your video funny my friend

The music is cliché music, let's start with that. Try to find some original music that's not used by EVERYONE

The effects are overdone, I recommend you do like 10 matches and record these, then take the best parts out of these matches instead of pasting emoticons here and there.
You've got alot to work on, lad
