Hey, an intermediate editor looking for eagle eyes!

[Puck Mitchell]

Alo elo peeps, second post. I'm doing well!
So, I have been editing for a while with Sony Vegas Pro and would like anyone really to review the edits, let me know what you think! I play Dark Souls 3 so preferably a fan also!
Don't hold back, honestly. Any harsh feedback will go over my head but constructive and I'll take heed!
Appreciate it! Here is my current intro, I feel It could do with a few tweaks but I spent so long getting it to where it is that I could tweak it for years before I am satisfied! Search ThePuckington Reborn - Not sure if the link is allowed to be posted, I'll give it a try anyhow!

 

[Rotten Sandwich]

Very impressive, however I will say it would be a very nice touch if you omitted the music that fades in and out from :11 to :12. I feel like the audio should end right after the dramatic drum pounding. Very good job otherwise

 

[Puck Mitchell]

Very impressive, however I will say it would be a very nice touch if you omitted the music that fades in and out from :11 to :12. I feel like the audio should end right after the dramatic drum pounding. Very good job otherwise

Oh right so after the beat hits, no echo?[DOUBLEPOST=1466074934,1465988602][/DOUBLEPOST]

Very impressive, however I will say it would be a very nice touch if you omitted the music that fades in and out from :11 to :12. I feel like the audio should end right after the dramatic drum pounding. Very good job otherwise

Hey Rotten, I found what your ears picked up, I made a few adjustments to the boom upon how quickly the image comes up and also it fades a bit later. Thanks for picking that up!

- ThePuckington Reborn.

 

[Detline]

I'm in education as a visual/motion graphic artist and did some work for commercials on television so I could give you some honest feedback if it goes about editing ! haha . (Im a pixel perfect f**er XD).

First of all, the font that you are using looks a bit cheap. Look at dafont for better fonts. Also it seems like you are using 3 different fonts (in the beginning the font looks a bit waving/deformed) Be consistent, deform everything or keep everything the same. concistent is always better.

The close up shot from 3 seconds till 5 seconds? seems a bit shocky, low quality and I'm not sure where i'm looking at. Maybe the shocking thing has to do with the FPS its captured. Skip it or place a better shot.

Music is good good timing, great job.

Flare at the end is to bright and to huge, Also the red colors of the font "Reborn" is different then the red of the glow behind "ThePuckintgon" also, Shouldn't it be Thepuckington instead of ThePuckintgon?

Last thing, at 11/12 seconds you can see a black square with 50% opacity? coming down, that looks a little bit weird. Also use easy ease keyframes, so your animation ends slowely (fade out) and not just BAM stops.

Sorry for my big feedback . Just want to help ya . Hope i could give you good feedback to use.

 

[Rotten Sandwich]

Loads better