Without sugarcoating, alright?
Editing: 9/10 - really, good job
Story: 5/10 - doesnt really tell me much about the movie, basically what the user above me said.
Effects: 2/10 - the part that kinda ruins the video for me. All the green and pixelized and thermal camera stuff, I didnt like that at all Im afraid.
Your editing however is so good that Id tell you to keep doing this kind of stuff, but make sure it tells a story, and ditch those effects, your editing is good enough to keep the focus on the video imho.