The text, why was there text like a few times? Either not do it or do it throughout the whole video, or something random or something, Not like this now, atleast I'd not suggest it.
The music choice was good!
Sometimes you and your friends are talking at the same time, try to work on that, so that only one of you talks and not all of you

The outro is also a bit too long, just like I'm gonna stare at the outro for 30 full seconds, nope noone is gonna do that

10 seconds for an outro should be enough already.
You and your friends commentary was good, the video and audio quality was fine.
So I'd still rate this video pretty decent but it wasn't perfect at all