Looking for an Outsider's Perspective on my Channel Branding & First Video

Brigadier Glyte

Brigadier Glyte

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It's too soon to see viewer retention figures, but I'm not sure what they're going to be. While I feel my video is informative and well edited, I'm not sure if it does a good enough job of drawing in the viewer.


Let me know your thoughts. Brutal honesty welcome.

Thanks,

Brigadier Glyte[DOUBLEPOST=1471885904,1471855445][/DOUBLEPOST]I have now written six reviews, and recieved none. Leeches.
 
Informational. Jokes were a bit weak in my opinion. When you were transitioning between spots you seemed lost of word of what to say next. Try to keep your words together or try to make a funny of you can't speak roight today. Stutteriness is normal and will get better through practice. The pros were Overwatch, a fun game to play and watch for tips, advice anything that the Overwatch can gain to be a better player and that you tried to enjoy the video when you made it. Props to you for making this. Stay Toasty!
 
Tuskan said:
Informational. Jokes were a bit weak in my opinion. When you were transitioning between spots you seemed lost of word of what to say next. Try to keep your words together or try to make a funny of you can't speak roight today. Stutteriness is normal and will get better through practice. The pros were Overwatch, a fun game to play and watch for tips, advice anything that the Overwatch can gain to be a better player and that you tried to enjoy the video when you made it. Props to you for making this. Stay Toasty!
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I didn't stutter in the past. It's a frustrating thing I try to avoid, but eh. Good points.
 
1st video I watched it till about 1:42 and 2nd video till 2:42. I'm probably not your target demographic, this seems aimed for younger teenagers maybe 13-14. But even then it seemed like you were trying to think and there was just dead air so I don't know how long a 13 year old would stay engaged.

I would suggest 3 things.

1) If you need to stop and think of what you want to say, cut that part out.
2) Maybe some background music or something?
3) If you're going to make a joke, be quick about it and get back to the information at hand. The jokes felt a little drawn out, and I just couldn't laugh at them sorry. :(

Like the comment said in your first video it's lacking structure. So I would suggest writing or typing out how the flow of the video is going to go.
 
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