Intro/Outro - constructive critics welcome

[Maliboo]

Well after several failed attempts, I believe I have something I am somewhat proud of. I feel like the outro is missing something or I worded it wrong. If you could please disregard the material in between and just focus on the intro sequence and outro (outro starts at 0:55)I would be forever grateful. Also, I want these to work with other types of videos like automotive and computer tech, but maybe I should make different ones...Advice?

 

[markkaz]

In looking at your intro, I thought that you channel name was "MAL BOO"
The 'i' gets lost in the light burst. That being said, I'm glad that it is under 5 seconds.

With the outro, It's too long. I would have the LIKE and F4VORITE swoop in faster with less time between each one.

I would recommend that you put Thanks For Watching in the lower third and then quickly swoop in your LIKE, FAVORITE, and SUBSCRIBE. It takes 12 seconds for the Subscribe to appear. By then, the viewer is long gone. You missed your opportunity to get them to subscribe.

 

[Maliboo]

Thank you for the help. Sometimes it is very difficult to edit your own work. I think this weekend I will spend time to do that.[DOUBLEPOST=1387345110,1387344950][/DOUBLEPOST]Oh and I checked out your channel. LOL. Reminds me of when I was younger, well much younger, my cousins and brother used to race in the basement. good times! There is a hobby shop near me that sells slot cars and some are actually really valuable. Now I am wishing we never destroyed that stuff when we were younger.