Input on my newest rant?

Dewmonic Abyss

Dewmonic Abyss

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Now, recently, I've decided to get back into commentary, since my gaming video spree wasn't really cutting it, and I missed my old commentaries, so I came back with what I thought was one of my best rants ever. It's a short comedic, cancerous rant (you know? The ones that have irrelevant gameplay in the background?) based around pills that dissolve on your tongue before you can swallow.

Here is the link:

So, I have 52 subs, alright? I'm not making the views. People aren't interested. So, I know I'm doing something wrong, but I don't know what. That's why I'm leaving myself at the mercy of you people. Now, don't be afraid to go all out on me. I'm a commentary channel, so I have quite the thick skin.

Here is what I want reviewed:
-Quality of the video. (This includes the actual quality, 1080p, the smoothness of the transitions in the video, quality of my audio, quality of my editing, and quality of my gameplay.)
-My humor. Were their jokes that really stood out? Was anything bland? How could I have made it better?
-My acting. How was my overall tone of voice? Did I sound robotic? Or did I sound like a normal person speaking to you? Or did I sound completely unenthusiastic? How can I fix that?
-My thumbnail. I made this thumbnail by scratch. How would you rate its effectiveness? How could it be made better?
-Length. Was it too short? Too long?
-Content. Did I manage to keep your attention? Was the subject discussed boring?
-Intro and outro. Was my intro skit decent? What did you think of my outro? How could I make them better?
-And lastly, I want input on anything you can think of. If you have ANY form of advice, please don't hesitate to let me know. I appreciate any and all feedback, negative or not.
 
Honest opinion coming through:
1. Editing is fine, I don't really see that much point in reviewing the gameplay since it really has nothing to do with it, maybe if it was me I'd use something more colorful but that doesn't seem that important. Quality of audio is fine and presentation pace seems fine though the beginning was a bit too long to actually get to the point.
2. Humor wise: at points a bit too much self-deprecative humor and a lot of jokes seem too forced.
3. Acting and voice seemed fine, maybe some lines where you went for something exciting it didn't reflect that much in your voice (ie 02:06 where you said god damnit but it felt like you're parents were in another room so you didn't go too loud and held back)
4. Thumbnail for me seems like a mess but I prefer more minimalistic stuff so for each his own.
5. Length was actually fine, not too short and not too long so it didn't get boring.
6. Subject was good and you got my attention for the whole video.
7. Outro seems pretty mediocre, if we are supposed to hear you talk then the music is a bit too loud for that. As for the intro :D check point 2
I feel that if you made more rants and videos you'll just naturally get better and feel more confortable with yourself so just keep it up.
 
@MudanTV
Thank you SO much! I was losing faith that this would actually get reviewed. xD

Alright, I'm glad to hear editing was fine. I have to work with Windows Movie Maker, so I'm always paranoid if there's more I need to do, but it's a relief to see there weren't any major flaws with that. For gameplay, I guess that was just paranoia, as well, cause I'm not sure how many people make a big deal about that. :P And yeah, I guess I could have shortened the beginning, now that you mention it. I just wasn't sure how to go about that.

Self-depracative. Interesting.. I have a tendency to do that a lot. Those are usually my go to jokes, but I'll keep in mind to make them more varied. As for jokes being forced.. That's true. I'm not sure how to go about that. Do you mean like the content of the joke, or the way I present them? o.o

As for like showing emotion and holding back, I actually don't have parents to live with. I have my own little place. For me, I don't really know how to present emotion too well. But I'll work on that. :P

For the thumbnail, yeah I just kinda wanted to experiment with that. It might just be personal preference, but I don't know. People who obsess over MLG stuff, for example, would probably adore it, and then minimalists would probably cringe at it.

As for the outro, I wasn't kinda torn between emphasizing the music or the video. The video I placed in it was just a video I was promoting, so I didn't want to give the full experience and I also wanted to make the presence of the music known, but at the same time, I didn't want it to be mute. So, it was a very conflicting process.

Thank you so much for the review, though! It's great to hear feedback! Even if it's criticism, I take that stuff to heart, because if there's something wrong, I need to know, so I can try and fix it. So, I appreciate it incredibly.
 
Dewmonic Abyss said:
@MudanTV
Alright, I'm glad to hear editing was fine. I have to work with Windows Movie Maker, so I'm always paranoid if there's more I need to do, but it's a relief to see there weren't any major flaws with that. For gameplay, I guess that was just paranoia, as well, cause I'm not sure how many people make a big deal about that. :p And yeah, I guess I could have shortened the beginning, now that you mention it. I just wasn't sure how to go about that.

Self-depracative. Interesting.. I have a tendency to do that a lot. Those are usually my go to jokes, but I'll keep in mind to make them more varied. As for jokes being forced.. That's true. I'm not sure how to go about that. Do you mean like the content of the joke, or the way I present them? o.o

As for like showing emotion and holding back, I actually don't have parents to live with. I have my own little place. For me, I don't really know how to present emotion too well. But I'll work on that. :p

As for the outro, I wasn't kinda torn between emphasizing the music or the video. The video I placed in it was just a video I was promoting, so I didn't want to give the full experience and I also wanted to make the presence of the music known, but at the same time, I didn't want it to be mute. So, it was a very conflicting process.

Thank you so much for the review, though! It's great to hear feedback! Even if it's criticism, I take that stuff to heart, because if there's something wrong, I need to know, so I can try and fix it. So, I appreciate it incredibly.
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I would recommend learning Premiere if you can since that would immensely help you with your editing, you could add different illustrations and animate them without problem and once you get the hang of it there is no stopping you.
About your jokes, I think it's more about the presentation, you just keep them coming one after another, don't really build them up or let them sink in.
About the outro, if you wanted to promote another video without actually showing it, maybe you could have picked only the most interesting clips so the viewer had an understanding that actually listening to it wasn't necessary, since I kinda thought it was just your next video but since you just talked in it I thought you were just having some final monologue maybe.
Glad to help out, you know, the more you make, the better you get the hang of it. Just need to keep 'em coming.
 
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