Dear Shawn,
I’ve been away from my computer for a few days and I’d already taken an eternity in getting back to you, so I double apologize for the wait. I’ve enjoyed looking at your very young channel and I have some thoughts.
Right off the bat I see that your production value is pretty respectable for a one-month old channel. When you’re facing your natural window light in your room, you look pretty good and your background works well. When you get away from that spot though, the levels are quite a bit more erratic. Adding lighting or making sure you’re properly positioning your shoot to literally put you in the best light possible is very important because it tells people that they’re going to be watching something well put together. If the lighting sucks I’m almost always instantly out, because bad lighting tells me the effort is low, and I can simply click my mouse a couple of times and find another similar channel that looks better. I can’t stress the importance of this enough. I’m sure you’ll keep getting that dialed the longer you work on it.
Your audio is usually good enough, but getting rid of the roomy echo should be a priority.
At times I can tell you’re going for a webcam look, which is fine as an artistic choice, but it isn’t the most flattering because it distorts the edges of your image. When you’re as close to the camera as you are, that includes your head, which makes you look weird at times. I don’t know what kind of camera you’re using, but if possible, the ideal focal length for undistorted filming is 50mm. It closely imitates the human eye’s perception of reality and it makes viewers feel like they’re watching something actual. That’s important for a vlog because vlogs generally try to convey a sense of reality. This is a taste issue, but an even, undistorted 50mm shot tends to work for lots of people.
At times your eyeline (where you’re looking when you’re on camera) wanders. This makes it feel like we’re talking to someone with a lazy eye and it’s uncomfortable (no offence to people with lazy eyes). Knowing where to look when filming is important because it makes you more engaging and conveys confidence on screen. This absurdly simplistic video might help:
I like that you’re trying your hand at getting into character and mugging a little for the camera. This is something that you’ll improve at with practice. My advice here is to film, then review footage, think about what you liked and what you didn’t down to the smallest details, then film it again and repeat until you’re happy with every aspect of how you came off in your video. This matters because you’re the star of the show and the happier you feel with your presentation, the more confident you’ll feel, and the better you’ll come off. This is real and it matters. Viewers can tell whether they’re prepared to articulate it or not.
You’re trying your hand at cutting together multiple shots, and that’s good. It’s a little rough around the edges, but that’s to be expected. Better cuts and better camera position will improve the quality of your videos in a hurry. This video will help:
I like your vlog content much better than your gaming content. I know you’ve only done one gaming video, but your commentary was sparse, and the footage wasn’t dazzling enough for most people to care. It’s just not the kind of thing that people are likely to flock to, but GTA fans might watch until the end. You have enough going on in terms of personal energy and presentation that it doesn’t play to your strengths to roll video game footage. Your channel is much stronger when you’re on screen.
You mentioned in your most recent video that you’re considering messing with your format a little, and I think that’s fine. Trial and error is a good idea, and you’re not married to anything here yet.
Yours is a tough channel to review because there isn’t a ton there yet. What I see is rough at times, and also has some good moments. You’re at your best when you’re well-lit, close to the mic, and giving high-energy commentary. You’re at your weakest when it’s dark, when you’re editing between cuts, and when you aren’t confidently looking into the camera.
It looks like you’re in the experiment and figure it out stage. I think you’re making progress and I think you have good charisma on camera. Finding some wheel-house subject matter that you can keep talking about to provide value to your audience and trial and erroring through the production process learning curve should probably be your priorities right now.
I wish you all the best as you move forward.
Take care,
Matt