I Am Bread - Feedback Please :)

[KillaDays]

I Am Bread is an Indie game that's been out for about a year, and I decided to play it. It's not an easy game, and I had to use a keyboard and mouse instead of a controller, so I wasn't having the time of my life. I think the biggest thing about this video is that it's too long and I'm breathing on the mic too much/hitting it. And I'm not centered in the face cam, which bugs me. But any feedback is appreciated! I'm always looking to improve.

 

[Martyvader]

It is a little long. I would try editing out the pauses and move the mic off to the side just a bit that way your breath isn't going into the mic. You don't have to do this, but I add music into the background of my videos if the game itself doesn't have any just because it adds depth to the video. You have an interesting personality so play it up! I like it so far. So tighter editing, move the mic over, add some music (if you want), and play up You! Good job so far!