Hi, I would like to improve my channel.

[DeadMerchant]

I have had my channel for awhile now I started with let's plays but those weren't for me. I now do gaming videos still but usually heavily edited ones with lots of graphics. I know I am probably doing a lot of things wrong but its hard to figure out what by myself. I think my branding is okay I think my problem is I don't have a series that you can see the real me in. My humor is also very sarcastic and idk if that is easy to connect with/watch. I would like to know if my writing style and comedy needs to change and if doing a more real down to earth series would be helpful in growing my channel.

Thank you to all that provide feedback.

 

[TheAlphaJayShow]

Alright, so I watched your "Game✔Fact - Episode 3 - Undertale, Secret Village of Temmies" video. Now, as far as comedy goes, there's certain tricks to the game that makes things funny. The type of comedy you're doing is very played straight. It's not a bad thing at all. In fact, on a few occasions, you did subvert my expectations, which can make for comedy. For examples, the "Temmies and Bob" thing. Now, it could work, but it feels like you're just firing jokes all over the place to see what hits. Let a joke sink in. Stop the music. Say it as seriously as possible. These types of jokes work when you think the person is going to say one thing and he says something totally different, and rolls with it. So nothing is wrong with your comedy, you just need to work on execution. Your branding is amazing. It feels very consistent. Some of your real life sketches, you just need to work on your execution. Your jokes work great on paper, but you need to have the energy to pull them off. Take your favorite comedian or YouTube personality, even their jokes can be flat if you say them the wrong way right?

So, your writing is great. I can see you getting a great following, but you need to work on your voice and execution of said joke.

 

[DeadMerchant]

Hey, thanks for the feedback. Yeah I will work on my delivery and voice acting. I will try to write into my scripts how to say things ahead of time to so i can give a better delivery.