Could I get some feedback on my video?

[LostTrigger]

Ok im getting used to commentating (i think) and i wanted to know what you think of this video? Mostly my voice, audio quality, if you found it interesting and any other general feedback/advice.

also i think I addressed (or adleast tried to lol) some of the problems other people mentioned. also i think the audio sounds a bit weird after i edited it through audacity?

but thanks for any advice/feedback

 

[Atis003]

Your voice is much clearer, better, although i think your voice is not fully developped, but this is a good thing, because with more videos you will get better and better. Maybe you should try to experiment with your voice, try changing the pitch, style, speed, etc.
Even if you dont want to make changes in your voice,you can still do these experiments without publicicing it would help in developping. I only know a really few youtubers whos voice doesnt change at all from their first video but now they are comfort with it and sometimes they are changing their style and i always find it amusing and different from standard(from the rest of the video), of course this is my personal opinion.