Review this video please!

[mrrandomguy466]

Hey Yttalk, I was wondering if you could check out this Minecraft lets build of mine. I think that it is one of my best videos on my channel and I hope you guys think it is good as well. I just want a review on the quality of my content

 

[thefedoranerd]

You seem to ramble a little bit, you should tell people what the video is about and then get right to the action/content.