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YTT's Tanager
Thanks for taking the time to do this.
Also, I know this video starts off slow, I have some viewers that don't know too much about John Green, so I tried to slide a quick bio of him in while staying interesting.
Holy man you're points all make sense and have definitely opened my eyes. Thanks a lot for your creative criticism, it'll definitely be implemented in my new videos!I liked this a lot! Here's my critique:
I saw another review of this movie that I think might be interesting for you to watch as well - they have a pretty "bickering" style, but they're pretty good at being accessible to the camera:
- Volume is a bit iffy - if you can find a way to speak louder, I think it'll be easier for your audience to relate to you (speaking subtly can subconsciously convey deliberate "distance" from the viewer, which you want to avoid on YouTube). But if that's not possible, I'd use a compressor on the audio before you upload.
- I'd trim down the "synopsis" portion of the review - I think most people likely to be searching for this are already familiar with the story in general (or can get that information elsewhere). What they can't get elsewhere is your unique perspective on the film. So I'd do my best to trim the synopsis down to just a sentence or two.
- Around 4:35, the image overlaps your head - don't be afraid to shrink down (or if you're feeling really ambitious, do some masking so the image appears to be "behind" your head.
- The last minute or so of your review was your favorite - because you were speaking naturally. It felt like before that, you almost felt compelled to go line-by-line through the items in the movie. I think this came off as a bit unnatural (you'd see this in a print review, but YouTube is a different medium). I'd recommend that you think about how you'd describe the movie to a friend - you might not mention all the actors, and you'd spend more time focusing about the parts that really grabbed your attention, etc. This is the type of relationship YouTube viewers typically want - if you can find a way to be less formal, I think it comes off better.
Honestly, I'm looking forward to seeing more of your stuff; I'm sure it's only going to get better
Thanks for taking the time to do this.Also, I know this video starts off slow, I have some viewers that don't know too much about John Green, so I tried to slide a quick bio of him in while staying interesting.
Would you be willing to give a general critique/advice of channel set up/looks as well as perhaps a few videos? I wouldnt mind getting one for YTtalkTV
Edit - If you cant do a few videos you could do my thumbnails video.
Would you be willing to give a general critique/advice of channel set up/looks as well as perhaps a few videos? I wouldnt mind getting one for YTtalkTV
Edit - If you cant do a few videos you could do my thumbnails video.
go on then criticize me
I'm not the best with layout reviews, but I do have some background in UI, so here are my points on the channel page. NOTE: other people, I'm not going to do channel reviews for ya. I just really like Michael :-P
That said, feel free to disregard all my advice on this one. I really have pretty iffy experience in UI. Aside from the Mashable redesign, I haven't done a ton.
- I don't like the background on the banner - dark themes tend to come off as less accessible, and while it fits with the thumbnails, it doesn't really match the theme of the forum. You likely want to try and consolidate the brand presence a bit. Obviously, you don't want to rip off YouTube's color scheme, but I think the OneChannel layout actually complements it really well. I'd look at something that involved the red/white, with the green accent color, to increase the association with the forum. And I'd probably keep the same background content, but 10% opaque against white rather than black.
- There's no intro video at the moment. I think *especially* with brand channels, the intro video is super important (since presumably, you want to cross-pollenate audiences between the channel and the forum)
- The Symph Reviews panel doesn't take up the full page at full-bleed. Right now in UI, images are everything; and having a shelf that's not complete makes the channel seem under-developed. I'd either add one more, or hide that shelf for the time being.
- A final point on thumbnails - the text is a bit small for me (which probably means it's small for others). I'd try to condense what's being said in order to just highlight a key word or two.
Back shortly with a video review.
Alrighty, video review time!
Cheers! So...am I banned? :-P
- I think the intro is exactly the right length!
- Again, I have to bring up the point of cohesive branding. The choice of music, and the very dark themes come off as grungy and seedy. This can be a fine style - but I don't think it reflects the open and accepting community of YTTalk. Dark themes convey mystery and distance; if I were designing a channel to complement the forum, the colors would be brighter, and the background music would be a cheerful (but not sappy) bed, as opposed to the rock.
- The back and forth between the title screen for your own voice, versus the video of the interviewee is a little odd. Presumably there's some technical limitation at the moment? It would feel more comfortable to see you delivering the questions (also, cutting back to you for reaction shots can help hide jump cuts).
- There's a bit of an imbalance between the audio - I'd do what I can to make sure your own voice *roughly* matches the interviewee. The background music needs to be a bit softer, but also, I'd probably add a bit of treble to your voice - you're using a much darker mic, which contrasts with the interviewee's comparatively bright sound.
- There are a couple of places where StraightEdge's responses are clipped - it's good to tighten, but you never want to lose consonants. In these cases, J-cuts and L-cuts can help you keep the pacing, without sacrificing the dialog.
- Sorry, I gotta mention music again - even if you stick with guitar, the pacing of the music is fairly frenetic, whereas StraightEdge's responses are laid-back. This causes a bit of a jarring contrast.
- You don't seem to react vocally to the interviewee's response - which can make things seem a bit scripted. Even just adding an "Oh, interesting." before a question can help things flow a bit more.
- It got better as things went along, but there were some pops and stuff on your mic at the beginning. A good pop filter should fix that right up