Small Youtuber TAG video Any feedback? Please Review?

[BillyVlogsTV]

I haven't done a tag video in a while, anyways I thought i do the small Youtuber tag.

Any feedback? What do you think?

And what do you think of the video thumbnail and the outro? Everyone

 

[XXLRay]

I now it's quite common for vlog but I really don't like the jump cuts. In my eyes it would better to use a different camera angle instead to hide the cut.
Probably look up the rule of thirds.
You shouldn't have your brightest light source (window) in your back. It worked out okay as you covered it up but you would still need to compensate with brighter light from your front.
The audio quality could profit from a dedicated lavalier or shotgun mic instead of using the on camera mic.
The outro is generally fine but could profit from some voice over.