Hey man,
So I just checked out your video...(this will be a longer response^^)
First of : Great choice of game!
I loved it but there are still a lot of people out there who don't know about this game so they might check a playthrough first. You gotta try to be a bit more specific with your choice of tags. I don't know if you installed "Tubebuddy" yet but its a great little app for your browser not only tag-wise but overall. I was sceptical at first but I really can't imagine working without it now ^^.
Your voice sounds really good on the capture and your mic seems to be decent as well. not perfect but your just starting. One thing I noticed in the whole way you were talking is that you'll seem to enjoy what you're doing and that's a big plus
Nonetheless try to influence the viewer a bit more. Try to look at your videos as sort of narrative. It's like playing a game with a friend. Say things like "Ok let's do this together now, shall we?" or "Did you see that? that was awesome!" The viewer feels way more involved with the whole game and starts to look at himself as someone whos a part of the adventure rather than just watching it.
I don't know what your plans in the future are but right now you are not using facecam (so am I). It has its pros and cons but that's for another discussion ^^.
Overall : Cool video very chill and relaxing to watch and your commentary adds a little bit of personality to it. For a newbie really nice
Next thing I took a look at was your rate of making videos. I don't know how occupied you are with school or jobs or whatever you're doing besides youtube, but you gotta boost those numbers man
I'll upload daily and I think it made my channel grow way faster but I have a lot of freetime on my hands at the moment ^^'. Maybe try to do atleast 3-4 videos weekly and try to upload them at a specific time each day ( people don't like uncertainty
).
To conclude : great voice, nice style of speaking, address the viewer more, pump up those numbers, and most important... keep having fun ! people will hear instantly when you're not having fun
Nonetheless I wish you and your channel the best of luck. I subbed cause I'm interested how you will develop
See ya ( told you it's gonna be a long one
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