Hi guys its Faz Ninja

[ToxicNinjaKid]

can someone give there option about my Channel description and help me come up with a better one Thank you
Hello my fellow the Faz Ninja i am Game and Video Editor welcome to my Gaming Channel here i will post Video game walkthroughs of the last games with HD Video quality and Live Commentary here are some games you can expect (GTA5) (Titan Fail) Distenity (Battlefield 4) sit back relax and enjoy be sure HIT Subscribe! PS be sure to pop over to my second Channel where i will post Montages AVMS Sony Vegas Tutorials and More subscribe to my second channel as well

 

[unknown_user0032]

Needs grammar. And some punctuation. Other than that it seems to explain things okay.

 

[ToxicNinjaKid]

does it make you want to come to my channel

 

[unknown_user0032]

does it make you want to come to my channel

No because that type of content doesn't personally interest me.

Also, if this is the text in your channel description, wouldn't people need to first visit your channel in order to see it?

 

[ToxicNinjaKid]

oh ok also do you happen to know if any GFX artist that could do some free work ?[DOUBLEPOST=1376911646,1376911137][/DOUBLEPOST]hi frankie do you know how to get my twitter show up under my channel url like yours

 

[Lilikoi Juice]

Is this perhaps translated? The grammar needs work. As for if it makes me want to visit your channel... If I were to see this as an advertisement, I would probably not go because it sounds really pushy--too many of "SUBSCRIBE!!!" and "Make sure to..." I don't fancy these things.

 

[ToxicNinjaKid]

Thanks for the tip can i add ya on skype