Her Chair: A short story

[Edrickson]

Hey guys, I am working on a novel, but in my spare time, I write short stories and random bits of literature.

Anyway, decided to stop hiding my work and begin sharing it with the world. I wrote this during my break at work. So I hope it doesn't feel too rushed. Just an idea I was playing around with.

Anyway, please give me feedback on the video to let me know what I need to do to improve!

I really hope to write more of these, but will only share if I feel people enjoy them/feedback is positive!

Have a good day and thanks for watching/reading!

Cheers! x

 

[Reesebomb]

Thanks for sharing, it was quite beautiful One thing I would recommend is adding a bit of appropriate and quiet piano music in the background. And then maybe adding a few different pictures to reflect what you're saying as you're saying them, you know what I mean?

 

[Edrickson]

Hey, thanks so much for taking time to watch it, and even more so for giving feedback!! That's a great idea. I might sort out a revised version next week. as for the images, i totally agree. I wanted to upload it quickly at the time, so i could get quick feedback. i wasnt sure if It would be liked. Now i know someone enioyed it, I will do it the honour of asking for my artist to do a few more images!

Thanks for the kind words. When I sort it out, I hope its more to your liking!