"Dismantle" Short Horror Film

Aaron Hurt

Aaron Hurt

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I was asked to submit a short horror film into a festival coming up soon. This is what I have so far. It has to be under 5 minutes. What do you think of it? How is the sound? The tension? I know there is really no story, more of a scenario, but does it hurt or help the film? Any feedback is awesome before I submit the final version.

 
I think the idea is extremely creepy it feels like a real life creepy pasta (but a good one). It's bloody terrifying and the video looks very good. The acting is great and the sound work very well to tell the darker parts of the story without waving it in my face. Basically you build tension very well, and translate the events in a very interesting and disturbing way (which is great for a horror film ^^) I like the fact you only see the doctor, it's simplistic yet effective. I want to say add more, but I think that is just my own curiosity coming into play. It's a great premise and giving so little piques the need to 'see more'.

I would advice you to either speak more clearly or make the voice louder. I had to strain to hear it, so I think you can work on that just a little bit. Also maybe at the end rather use the white-light a little more, rather than the pixelated stuff, it kinda breaks the tension. Perhaps leave the idea that is he dead a little longer ? The ending is great it just feels a little rushed. :)

Other than that I loved it! I hope you get great ratings! (or win? I have no idea how film festivals work XD) But good luck with the entry!
 
Thank you so much for the response and sorry its taken me a while to get back! I'm glad that you think it builds the tension. That was one of my main fears. Obviously the goal wasn't to be pop-out scary, rather a slow burning terror/suspense. So, i'm glad it has that effect. As for the feedback on the voice, I just mastered the audio and that really made things sit well together. I'm glad you brought that up, otherwise I would have missed it. With the white light part, would it benefit from it being more drawn out? And how would you transition back into the surgery? That part has been one of the hardest to transition back to.
 
Holy f**k that was so creepy - very well done. I think no story outside that frame can leave the viewer with questions so it helps in the experience :)
 
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