Would love some feedback on my commentary? :) (it's my first ever)

[Spiink15]

hey guys i put up my first ever commentary and i would really appreciate it if you guys could check it out and give me feedback/tips, i know its not the greatest and i would love to improve

Please help me out

Here is the video:

 

[AutosavingUnicorn]

Great commentary!
You don't say "umm" a lot, you have a lot to talk about and I can tell you've got good talent.
Keep up the good work, and if you ever need commentating tips I have a video on my channel titled, "How to make your video game commentaries interesting" that has helped a lot of people :3
-AU

 

[DT Black Hawk]

Lol rock band mic didn't even know you could use that! But you got potential keep it up also. I'd use a different mic if theres anyway, just sounds like your far and its masking the game audio. I'd either raise the game audio just a tab or lower you voice audio or a new mic would do it haha just saying, I use a snowball but I did use my Turtle beach x11's and from what I got they sounded like a high quality mic plus their pretty cheap now.