Review the start of my new series?

[Apoxa]

Hey guys can you possibly review my next series I'm starting. It's a Borderlands 2 one. I want to know if it caught your attention or not because on my last lets play it didn't last long due to low viewership. If you could tell me how to possibly keep the audience attention that would be awesome!

 

[Vincent the Watermelon]

I think you are doing pretty good, but you should have a little less "dead air" where you aren't talking and try to sound a little more enthusiastic. But don't worry, I've got the same problems so we are in the same boat. Here is my latest beginning to a new series: