Reveiw my channel trailer?

[Orbit]

I just made a new channel trailer which I think is a step up from the quickly thrown together mess I previously had. I'd appreciate any and all feedback. Especially any criticism or points you don't like about it?

Credit for the origional template goes to Skax Design btw

 

[Turwinkle]

Wow! A great channel trailer! You really did a great job with the design. The ending to your video was I think your weakest part. Tighten that up. It sounded like you were unsure of how to end it..whereas the beginning was very well done..more on point. So I would just re-do the ending to be more focused and I think it will be an awesome channel trailer! Great job so far!

 

[Orbit]

Thanks I'll take another look at it, I actually did that on purpose but if that wasn't obvious then I guess I'd just look a bit like an idiot lol[DOUBLEPOST=1371739508,1371726146][/DOUBLEPOST]Ok I made the ending less derp lol, so if anyone else had feedback I'd still appreciate it?