Ooo another slender game. I still have awful memories of how terrifying the forest one was, lol! Get ready, here comes the feedback..
1. The annotation. Fade it out please! I know I can press a button to turn annotations off, but then what if you put another annotation at the end of your video that links me to more of your content? I'd like to be able to see it. What I don't want to see is a yellow box in the bottom left for the whole video, I want to be immersed with you, I want to enjoy this terrifying game you're playing! Upon finishing the video I see you do have annotations for subscribing and the like, so yeah, if I had disabled annotations I wouldn't have been able to see this!
2. Your cam. Now I don't have a hatred for cams the way that a lot of people do, I don't mind them at all as long as they're not covering important parts of the game. Slender is a perfect game to use one because the UI elements are minimal, and I want to see how scared you are. However like half your face was cut off the entire video. Test this out before you start recording, hunch over and move around a bit. Make sure your face stays in the cam the whole time so it's at least worthwhile to have it up.
3. Cursing. I do the same thing in my videos, and I'm not saying don't do it. Cursing has comedic and entertainment value. But back that up with some real commentary as well. After you say f**k 17 times in a row, string together an actual sentence so we know you haven't just had a seizure or something.
On a serious note though, cursing will turn some viewers off quite a bit and it's something to keep in mind. If you don't care if people are offended, more power to you! Some YouTubers do quite well with very offensive language, there's viewers out there for that sort of thing, it's just a thought. The most important thing is you don't fall into the trap of using curse words as an excuse to not actually commentate. I know in a game like this when you're scared as hell and this thing is chasing you, it's hard to think and play and run all at the same time, but that's the challenge! Work at it, see if you can do it.
Which brings me to my final thoughts. You have a good voice for videos, I personally like it a lot. I love accents though, so I may be biased. Your thumbnail is.. interesting XD Certainly eye catching, and that's a good thing. It's well done. You kept me around for the entire video, and there was multiple parts where I was honestly just as scared as you were, and your screams of OH f**k OH s**t s**t s**t f**k OH NO kept me really involved and made me feel like you seriously were about to die! It might sound dumb when it's type out like this, but it's true. I felt very involved during the video, and that kept me there until the end, I had to see if you died or not. Keep making videos man! Of all the flaws I found, none were truly "gamebreaking" for me. Just little minor annoyances. Of all the things you can do wrong in a video, these are some of the smallest mistakes you can make.
