It seems alright. You could kick it up a notch by putting links to other vids you'd want others to watch/put a subscribe button and link to subscription somewhere in there. Also, I see you're using Royalty Free Music by Kevin MacLeod "Cut and Run". You should credit him for that or you could get copyright.
Rating: 6/10
To be honest, I probably wouldn't stay to watch the entire outro once a video is done. I think if you do add an outro it's rather important to have it linking people to further content, like the next in a series, the start of a playlist or a previous video.
Yeah, don't get me wrong it's a well-made outro. I think it could capture people's attention a bit more and guide them to your other videos.I will do that, thanks.
I'll do that at some point. This is actually the first outro I've ever created. I'll change it and destroy it and start it again in a month, tops.