I think your video could really do with a proper introduction as to what you're doing and what qualifies you to say to people 'how to become a successful youtuber' - you could use this intro for all the videos as a nice way to connect the series. Also, show the equipment, show people how it works, what to do with it. You lost me completely when you started talking about the Xbox recording equipment. A nice little section of you showing how it plugs in, how it records etc with you narrating over the top of it would have been useful because I have no idea how they work.
Also, I would steer clear of even talking about torrents.