How is my intro?

[Division Citrus]

What do you helpful people think of my channels' intro? and thumbnails ? All feedback would be nice just so it can be perfect I want take any constructive criticizm offensively
http://www.youtube.com/user/DivisionCitrus

 

[Grohlvana]

The text is a bit hard to read, but it's a great first banner. Also the link to your YT channel near your signature does not work.[DOUBLEPOST=1367873701,1367873630][/DOUBLEPOST]Sorry, realized you wanted feedback on your intro. Again, the text is really hard to read and it goes by so fast I don't think anyone's really going to be able to read it. That being said, it's definitely a unique intro.

 

[Pervert Pete]

The text is a bit hard to read, but it's a great first banner. Also the link to your YT channel near your signature does not work.[DOUBLEPOST=1367873701,1367873630][/DOUBLEPOST]Sorry, realized you wanted feedback on your intro. Again, the text is really hard to read and it goes by so fast I don't think anyone's really going to be able to read it. That being said, it's definitely a unique intro.

Exactly what he said. Text is too hard to read and goes by too fast but besides that, its friggin awesome, I really like it!