are you like me and hate bullys real life or troll kind

this has it's good qualites and it's not so good qualities. The rhyme is pretty good, you're a little all over the place, I'm not sure I would have gone with the "gay but not in a homosexual way" line but that's just me, alot of the rhymes were actually pretty freaking cool. But what almost ruins it for me is that you're reading your lines of a cell phone. I would really encourage you to memorize your rap no matter how long it takes so you can be truly expressive when you're making the video and it won't seem so... unprofessional. And the only other thing was that I think the vocal is so loud it's not in the pocket with the mix, I'd like to hear the music and vocal be matched in volume a little better cause the vocal is overpowering everything atm. But outside of those criticisms it was pretty good, and you've got a really cool look going on with the shades and everything. I look forward to seeing another from you.
 
symphonious7 said:
this has it's good qualites and it's not so good qualities. The rhyme is pretty good, you're a little all over the place, I'm not sure I would have gone with the "gay but not in a homosexual way" line but that's just me, alot of the rhymes were actually pretty freaking cool. But what almost ruins it for me is that you're reading your lines of a cell phone. I would really encourage you to memorize your rap no matter how long it takes so you can be truly expressive when you're making the video and it won't seem so... unprofessional. And the only other thing was that I think the vocal is so loud it's not in the pocket with the mix, I'd like to hear the music and vocal be matched in volume a little better cause the vocal is overpowering everything atm. But outside of those criticisms it was pretty good, and you've got a really cool look going on with the shades and everything. I look forward to seeing another from you.
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cheers man yeah thanks for ya comments i know i need a microphone then i can get these all out you know heres another snoop gave me the beat and facebook liked it shame theres no pleasing the3stuffshow chuuuch check this out
 
That beat is sooooo P funk. This one's definitely mixed better. Might could have picked up the energy just a tad, I know you were going for that "lazy" feel but it might be just a TAD too lazy, but only ever so slightly. Outside of that tiny criticism I thought this was really good! Snoop Dogg actually made that for you? Wow... That's pretty rad. Maybe someday we should all kick back and smoke a doob hahaha I've always thought snoop was pretty cool. Anyway, keep it up! I dig it!
 
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