FEEDBACK ON MY NEW VIDEO!?

[Its Ryan]

Hey guys I make funny moments videos and my recent video was really really bad. I would like to know what I can fix and learn from.
Should I fix my audio? my editing? Idk let me know
And also how can I get the word out about my videos? Its hard now these days.

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[iMSaiyan]

I still stick to what I said last time about the webcam -- the audio needs to be more clear - sounds very airy/echoy -the pop up words on the screen was used like a very long time ago. Not saying that it's dead but it kinda is haha to me it is. It does add some funny moments to the video but I think once or twice is more than enough unless it's used in a scary video like Markiplier did with his first video ever.