Hey,
I have watched your video and I have checked out your channel and I want to highlight some of the good stuff you are already doing before I offer some suggestions;
Positives;
- You have some great graphics and good looking thumbnails (eye catching and decent quality)
- You accent is a great asset, I would use it more and make it funny
- Some of the opening edits you do to video are great, like the Season 1 video.. different pictures appearing when you say the words (see it in other videos too) -- I would try and make them a little more funny and outlandish (this is up to you)
Things I Would Change
- I would try using more clickable video titles (names of video) - a lot of the videos on the channel don't have searchable titles.. when I say searchable I mean, they aren't titles that people are searching for like "How To", "New DLC", "Get x Kills" (food for thought)
- The video you posted above and other videos, have a decent enough start but then they slow down -- this video for example, you don't get into any action until after 3 minutes.. I would have taken/used less time on the load out
- I would make some of these videos shorter, more action packed, and funny (if you want that) - short kill cams and epic multi kills maybe
- I have seen in some of the other videos you leave in bits where you have been killed or you miss shots -- this is purely subjective but I would only leave a clip where you are killed in the video.. if you make it funny or joke about it... (this is purely up to you) - I would want the viewers to think I am invincible
- I would add some audio to the video, even if it is low volume
- There are some bits in the above video where you are not talking and there is no action, unless the clip is essential to tell the story or make a joke I would crop it out
All of the above are just suggestions and stuff that I would do, it is purely up to you and if you have a certain plan for your videos then stick to it and learn as you go
Hope this helps in some way
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