Ok...first off, what I notice, you say that these are the top ten things...but I don't visually see numbers when you place them. This isn't a huge deal in most cases, but I feel when you're doing a top ten, it would be nice to see numbers before and/or during the topic you're speaking on. Also, are these in any particular order? Is one more important than the other? If not, then why are they the top ten things to help design your channel better? What if you get a comment where someone posts a very valid point which would trump some of these reasons or even clump them together? Then what? Top ten is something very subjective, so I feel like it should be used in a more subjective way. Unless, of course, you are going about it objectively; If you are going at it objectively, why do you start the countdown at one? Shouldn't the best be for last? I guess what I'm trying to say without beating the horse anymore is consider the name you're using. I understand you may have chose it to get more hits, but that's what tags are for, and if you're going to make a title for hits, you must commit to it. Make an actual top ten.
Secondly, I feel that some of the photos you used in your description were a bit of overkill...for instance: for your #1, I feel that text would have worked better than a picture of, what I'm guessing is a youtube layout. Your #2 made no sense, which in theory is great for what you were looking to accomplish, but it left me confused as to why it was there. Again, text would have helped better, just emphasizing your points.
To dig into your actual tips, the only one I disagree with is pornography or scantly clad people on the channel...that's actually against policy and will get your channel taken down, whether or not that's what you're going for.
Lastly, your sound spikes quite a bit when you talk. Try backing up a little on the mic. It's okay if your sound is too quiet, there are ways to make yourself louder, but you can never get rid of those spikes in the sound. Also, I hear you stumbling over your words sometimes and even skipping words in your sentences. I can feel a hint of nervousness behind the mic. A good way to fix this is multiple takes. Just do your voice over again and again and again until you're tired of saying it. Not only does it loosen you up and make you less self-conscious about talking (because you've done it so much already), you now have multiple versions of that segment...so if you don't like how one sounds, you have 5-10 others you can choose from!
So that's the negative...positive:
I like the background you used and the choice of music. It fits. As well as your points, I actually used this video to change my layout back when I first came onto this forum. I watched this and was like "Oh s**t! My layout is default! I fail!" So I definitely believe there is a lot to learn and take from this video, but with a little polish and patience, you can make something like this leagues better.