hey, I saw this on YT talk and thought that I would drop by and check it out. I'm going to give ya feedback. I'm still a small youtuber but I hope my insight can help.
I judge based on 3 aspects and a secret 4th one. 1. video quality, 2. audio quality, 3. content
1.video quality.your vlog does need some improvement but aside from that, I did like your personality, especially when your friend protected his egg XD. you do need more cuts and stuff, it does draw out at times so try to skip the boring parts.
2. now for audio. your audio is great during the gameplays but during your vlog...try to get something to fix the audio issue. ( audio is a big thing for me)
3. content. I'm loving your content bro, keep it up and post more vids! we could do a collab sometime if you like XD.
overall I give this a 3/10 below average. ill give ya props for trying, but unless you improve these, you're not going to grow.