Feedback on my new video

[xMiche]

Hey guys i'm a new youtuber and i've made a couple videos and i'd like to see what I could improve on. Please let me know what you think and subscribe and like if you want

 

[TheScarletBlaze]

First of all good levels of Audio Gameplay's Not too loud commentery is loud enough, voice is clear the only criticism would be you tend to go off topic a little bit so maybe edit the video a little more to cut the fat but otherwise a good video