About commentary

ettio

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I have been uploading videos for around two weeks now and Ive decided to start to focus more on my commentary in my videos. This is because ultimately, to me, if the commentary in a video is bad I immediately leave, also because it could be a way for me to improve my speech outside of videos while talking face-to-face. Do I need to be more energetic, try to speak more clearly?
So in short, how can I improve my commentary in my videos?

Newest video for reference: